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Politicians - More Deadly Than by ~LeftHandofRuin:iconLeftHandofRuin:



Politicians — More Deadly Than Soldiers

The sound of clashing steel echoes through the dense forest
As legionaries marched in square formations.
There spears held up and their shields out front.
Their shiny armor glistens in the afternoon sun.
It is a cold fall day in the forests of Gaul
As clouds of foggy breath rise into the air.

A hard long shout from a barbarian warrior
Fills the air with a wild earthly magic.
The soldiers in red cloaks and golden helmets
Filled with horse hair plumes
Form into a living tortoise.
Protected from any attack.

The air fills with thousands of arrows
Screaming toward their targets like
Oversized angry bees.
Savage warriors in bear hide clothing
Charge with unchecked brutality.
They slam against the large square shields
And wrestle with futility.

Caesar stands in the rear, directing his forces
As a shaggy Gaul who towered over the Romans
Raced toward the short little general.
The legion closes and protects their beloved
Leader from any harm.
Breaking the barbarian under spears and shields
Protecting the future emperor from any soldier.
And yet Caesar’s life was ended prematurely.
Because Politicians are more deadly than Soldiers
©2006-2009 ~LeftHandofRuin
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One of the poems I wrote for W203. I figured I'd post them up here while I try to break into poem writing.

Due to certain circumstances in the class, I had to review my own work and submit it to the head of the creative writing department to be graded. I figure I should post what I said since I understood what was going on better when I wrote that than I do looking back at my work.

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great visual pictures. I like it. The idea itself has proven over years of civilization. The rulers always are more deadly than the people.

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I wish I could write like you.

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If you're going to wish you could write like somebody else, you should wish you could write like somebody awesome. ;)

I haven't had a chance to read your own writings yet, but I can guarantee that they will get better as you get older, both as you mature, you practice, and you learn new things that improve your writing, be it techniques or experiences.

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